Comments on: You’re Sew Inside: Exploring BurdaStyle.com

By: FashionMarketing

FashionMarketing — Wed, 09 Jun 2010 17:54:25 +0000

Ally, this was a contributed post. It was reviewed for clarity and cohesiveness. While I see the value in your sentence structures, it's formal and correct for business. While I agree that "create" is a better word than "allowed", here's the rest of my thoughts:

I don't 100% edit pieces that are contributed from writers, especially if they're overseas. I keep their tone and voice. The way in which others write in English when it's a second language is reflective of how they use them in their native tongues.

I would put more value to the comments above if the email address and websites actually existed. And why only this one post are the two of you so focused on this one post?

By: GetItRight

GetItRight — Wed, 09 Jun 2010 16:51:07 +0000

FashionMarketing If you understood subordinating clauses and dependent conjunctions and you might not write things like this:

To add value to the network, Burda removed the copyright to the company’s patterns, which allowed an open source-sewing platform

which would be better as:

Burda removed the copyright to the company’s patterns which created an open-source platform and added value to the network.

By: FashionMarketing

FashionMarketing — Thu, 03 Jun 2010 17:36:25 +0000

Nancy – Please point out what you feel isn't understandable?

By: Nancykarpen

Nancykarpen — Thu, 03 Jun 2010 17:33:12 +0000

Do you delight in making up grammar, syntax and new words? This is one of the most incomprehensible pieces I've read in a long time.

By: uberVU - social comments

uberVU - social comments — Mon, 19 Apr 2010 15:12:36 +0000

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